The wall was covered with paintings and artwork by local artists.
The walls exploded with paintings and artwork by local artists.
anytime you can use another verb for was or find a better way to say it, do it (most of the time)
I'm not saying that exploded was the best word choice, but if you can find any way to say it without using passive verbs, do it
Mrs. S: that makes sense too!
this is all incredibly helpful advice
me: and again, those three things change when you practice
you figure out that either
a) you're going to get the story out and fix it later
b) you do the work AS you write
I do a little bit of both.
I draft as fast as I can to get the scenes out
and then the next time I sit down to write
I go back and look for things to edit
that's what I did with HOURGLASS
I will not do it again
Mrs. S: well moving forward I can be more conscious of it and then revise later
me: I need to free write because I don't plot/outline
I listen to what they tell me (the VOICES!)
and sometimes, 3/4's of the way in, I find out they've lied to me
and nothing sucks worse than slaving over revising a paragraph you end up having to cut
Mrs. S: hahaha so true
me: Important: Your writing life will drastically change if you give yourself permission - and I mean FULL permission - for that first draft to suck donkey balls.
You'll have flashes of genius beside lots and lots of poo.
Mrs.S: well I pretty much didn't expect it to be spetacular and sell as is LOL
me: I did.
I remember when I typed The End
I was ALL
THIS IS IT
I bet if I read that draft now I'd have to be hospitalized.
Mrs. S: LOL
me: Here's what you need to know tho
the mythology, the world, the people
no one can teach you that stuff
you are either a storyteller naturally or you aren't
I think it's possible for a person to learn it, but it's hard to come by
it's like teaching someone how to feel
the storyteller part is there for you, Mrs. S, and the more you read and write the stronger it will get
the other stuff is mechanics and it CAN be learned
you just have to WANT to learn it and WANT to be better
I have no use for someone who isn't willing to work for it
I think you are
Mrs. S: I definitely want this even though i am a bit terrified of it
me: well hells bells, that's excellent
if you aren't terrified you aren't doing it right
and when you get done with your book, if you don't hate it you aren't doing that right either
I fully believe that what makes the difference is choosing to respond by ... being a like a dog with a pork chop
you aren't letting go dammit
that pork chop is YOURS
and you will FIGHT to keep it
because you freaking LOVE pork chops
Mrs. S: I can love pork chops =P
it is really strange because I didn't have stories floating around in my head ever before now I have them all the time I seriously have 3 completely different stories outlined I don't know where it came from all of the sudden
me: you've always been a reader, yes?
Mrs. S: yeah more so since I graduated college
me: they've been up there in the Crock Pot that is your brain
it doesn't work like that for everyone but I think it does for most writerly people
Mrs. S: thank you for reading my stuff and being willing to talk about it with me
I feel better
me: Let me add, that along with my pork chop analogy is this
i need a good analogy dammit
I GOT IT
you need to be a sponge
you need to absorb what you read and learn
so your new motto is
be a spongey pork chop
Mrs. S: that sounds revolting on sooo many levels LOL
me: i mean
be a spongey dog with a pork chop
I think we can figure out a way to put that on a t-shirt